Reflection 4.1

This essay was much harder to write than I thought. I have all the stories and experiences in my head, but it's really hard to take everything I've learned and put it into an essay for others to understand. I didn't realize how hard and extensive it would be to explain my foster sibling's back stories and map out their change. I may have used too many details, but not enough narrative technique. I definitely think I have a lot of revising to do with this essay. Even though we read plenty of narrative essays in class, it has helped more to read my classmate's papers and witness the peer revisions. I can take a lot of the constructive criticism they got and use that to better my own paper because I have realized I made a lot of the same mistakes. I think I need to also work on the overall flow of this essay as well. Also, it was much harder than I thought it would be to find good evidence to back up my claim. I spent a very good amount of time looking for the right sources to support the fact that more people should take on foster parenting. However, I found a lot of evidence that shows the problems foster children face in their future. I want to convey the opposite idea though- that the presence of a foster family can prevent this negative fate. Hopefully I'll find a jackpot source with more research and then I'll be able to incorporate that evidence in my essay to help convey the claim with more fluidity.